I'm not entering myself into my own competition, but I don't want to be left out either! So here's my effort. It was runner up in the Writers' Magazine competition many moons ago - Louise Wise
The Alien
Was it human? It didn’t look human.
Its eyes were a strange blue colour, but they weren’t looking at me. Just staring
up at the Winnie-The-Poo spinney thing over its cot. Its face was red from
crying – or anger, I couldn’t tell.
I ducked down and wriggled out of
the nursery on my belly. Better the alien not see me go, it might laser me with
its weird eyes. My dad’s legs stopped me from wriggling all the way to the top
of the stairs.
‘I’m going to feed Ella, and see
if that sends her to sleep,’ he said, sounding tired.
The alien began to make strange
noises, which rose into an ear-splintering wail. Dad stepped over me and headed
into its compound.
I wriggled back towards the
nursery, and watched as my dad lifted the alien into his arms making soothing
noises. He settled into the feeding chair and began to feed it alien protein.
‘Is Mum still in bed?’ I asked
from the doorway (didn’t want to get too close).
The alien grunted, and sucked
furiously. After a moment, Dad pulled the bottle out of the alien’s mouth, and
sat it up. He began to rub its back. The alien began to wail, and Dad quickly
laid it down and stuck the bottle back in its mouth. The crying stopped.
‘Sorry, son, what did you say?’
asked Dad.
‘Is Mummy still poorly?’
‘She isn’t ill,’ Dad said. ‘She’s
tired. You must be a good and play quietly. OK?’
I wriggled away. The alien was
boring. All it did was cry, sleep and poo. The poo was a yucky green, which was
the only cool thing about it.
The alien had been growing in
Mummy’s tummy for months. She’d been getting fatter and fatter and fatter. I
thought she was going to pop. Good job she didn’t. What a mess! The doctor
called Midwife (stupid name) took the alien out. Mummies have a special hole
for babies to come out. I was glad to hear this. I thought they’d cut Mummy
open and forget to sew her back up or something. Or sew her to the operating
table! I tried to imagine Mummy cooking dinner with a large table stuck to her
back.
‘At least we’d have a table
wherever we are,’ Daddy said in my head. ‘We could go into any Macdonald’s and
no matter how full, we’d always have a table.’
Downstairs, I turned the TV on.
It flicked straight to the programme I had on a moment ago: Clone Wars. Anakin
Skywalker and Obi-Wan Kenobi were leading Clone troops towards an impressive
looking spaceship; their lightsabers were poised and ready for action. I’d seen
this episode, but settled to watch it again. I wished I were Anakin. I wondered
what he’d do with the alien upstairs.
Ah, what I needed is my sword. I
didn’t have a proper lightsaber, so my pirate sword would have to do.
Forgetting to be quiet, I ran upstairs and into my bedroom. Head and shoulders
in my toy box I pulled out various items until I found what I was looking for,
and pulled it out with a whoop of glee.
‘Sssh!’ Dad said from my doorway.
‘I’ve just got Ella asleep.’
‘I’m Anakin,’ I said, pointing my
sword at him.
‘And I’m Tired,’ Dad replied.
I thought this was funny and
giggled, but he hushed me again and pulled my door closed.
‘Be gone, Droid,’ I said to the
closed door. I swivelled around, swishing my sword about and knocking my money
box Tardis to the floor with a crash. ‘Take that. Ha! Can’t catch me.’ I dodged
to one side and then the other as my imaginary Droid assailant took up my
challenge. I didn’t hear Dad coming up back the stairs. He burst in looking
cross, and pointed a long finger at me.
‘Downstairs, now!
I looked up at him in puzzlement,
and for a moment I was scared he was about to wallop me. He’d never hit me
before, and neither has Mummy. Only bullies hit, Mum says. With my head drooping,
I walked from my room and downstairs. The alien began to wail from its compound
and Dad said a word that I’m not allowed to say.
I felt so sad. My daddy was angry
with me, and Mummy was so poorly that she was asleep all the time.
The doorbell rang just as I
reached the bottom step. I’m not allowed to answer the door, but I could see
Nanny and Granddad through the glass pane. I grinned happily as I struggled
with the catch, and then pulled open the door. Nanny always has something in
her handbag for me, and Granddad will pick me up on his shoulders then
‘pretend’ to forget I’m there. They won’t frown, shout or ignore me.
‘Hello,’ Dad said from the top of
the stairs as Nanny and Granddad stepped into the hallway. The alien was in his
arms making funny sounds. ‘You’re a sight for sore eyes,’ he says. ‘I could use
some help with this little bundle of joy.’
Nan held out her arms. ‘Let me
take her. You look shattered, love.’
Dad came downstairs and handed
over the alien. Nan lifted it up on her shoulder, and the alien quietened
immediately. ‘How’d you do that?’ Dad said, but he laughed.
‘Years of practise,’ Nanny said.
‘Lynne in bed?’
Dad nodded. ‘We had another bad
night with Ella. Lynne did the night shift.’
‘Stop pulling at my bag, Jacob,’
Nanny said without looking at me. ‘It’ll get easier,’ she said to Dad.
Dad nodded again, and I stopped
trying to look in Nanny’s bag for sweets. I sat on the bottom stair and looked
up at them. None of them looked my way. They all went into the front room
leaving me in the hall. After a while, I climbed back up the stairs. About to
cross the landing, I heard the shower from Mummy’s bathroom in her bedroom. I
lingered outside, and finally, the shower ended.
The door opened, and Mummy stood
there belting up her pink dressing gown. ‘Jakey,’ she said with a smile. She
hugged me, and I buried my head against her tummy. I loved the way she smelled:
a special Mummy smell.
‘I thought you’d forgotten to
wake up,’ I said, pulling back.
She laughed. ‘I’ve been tired.
Mummies with new babies are always tired.’
‘Why did you have a baby. Don’t
you want me?’
‘Of course I want you! I love
you, Jakey. Having another baby doesn’t mean I don’t want you. My goodness,
you’re my first ever baby. My precious little boy, and baby Ella loves you
too.’
‘She does?’
‘Of course. We all love you.’
‘I think Daddy’s forgotten.’ I
frowned as I remembered the way Nan and Granddad seemed to ignore me at the
front door. ‘And Nanny and Granddad.’
We went downstairs to find Nanny
changing the alien’s nappy on the pink changing mat on the floor; I looked for
green poo but the alien was clean.
‘Babies need looking after,
Jake,’ Mum said. ‘Lots and lots of looking after. You are such a big boy now,
seven years old and almost a man.’
‘Will I grow a beard?’
‘Not yet, but you don’t need us
as much care as Ella does. You can go to the toilet on your own, you can tell
us when you’re hungry. You can ride a bike, you can do lots of things that Ella
can’t.’
My chest swelled until my Sponge
Bob T-shirt strained against the pressure. ‘Is it because she’s stupid?’
Mummy shook her head. ‘It’s
because she has to learn these things. There will be lots for you to teach her.’
I chewed on my lip as I mulled on
this new information. Maybe I could teach her how to tidy my room?
‘Ah,’ said Nanny, and winked at
my mum. ‘Time for you know what?’
Mummy nodded. Daddy came in with
Granddad; Dad was carrying a tray with cups of tea and a huge chocolate cake.
Mum and Daddy swapped funny
expressions, and then Dad’s gaze dropped to me. ‘Want some chocolate cake,
son?’ he asked. ‘You can have a piece with the most chocolate flakes.’
Nanny finished dressing the alien
and, with it in her arms, stands. ‘I’ll take her up,’ she said.
‘Thanks,’ said Mum, and she sat
on the settee. I snuggled next to her and happily awaited my slice of cake.
Granddad sat on the other side to
me, and squeezed my knee. ‘I bet Ella won’t be as good at football as you,’ he
said.
I’d already figured she’d be
rubbish, but nodded anyway. Dad handed me a huge piece of chocolate cake, then
Nanny came back looking puzzled. In her hands, she held a gift-wrapped parcel.
‘Look what I found at the bottom
of Ella’s cot,’ she said.
‘That’s odd,’ said Mum. ‘Is it a
present for Ella?’
Nanny shook her head. ‘It’s from Ella, only I can’t read the label.’
‘Let me see,’ Dad said, taking
the parcel from Nan. He turned it over in his hands. ‘The writing isn’t very
clear.’
Granddad, his mouth full of cake,
said, ‘It’s for me.’
Dad shook his head. ‘I think I
can make out the letters J and A.’
I’m almost bouncing up and down.
‘I’ve got a J and an A,’ I said.
Dad looked at me in amazement.
‘So you have,’ he said. He hands over the parcel. ‘I guess this must be for you
then, from Ella.’
I unwrapped it quickly. Inside
was a lightsaber. I pressed a button and the sword shot out in a range of
colours with a high pitched buzzing noise. My cake is quickly taken off me, as
I danced around the room fighting an imaginary foe.
I think the alien isn’t so bad
after all.
Read another short story from Louise Wise on Kindle: Scruffy Trainers by Louise Wise
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Imagine being stranded.
No way of getting home.
No telephone, no computer, no shelter.
No food.
Now imagine the place you're stranded is another planet.
Then you realise you're not alone after all . . .
Beauty and the Beast for adults.
I enjoyed that story, Louise! It made me smile and Jake's feelings are very real and true to life.
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ReplyDeleteI liked it too. How come you haven't written a children's book?
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I'm getting so much spam lately. Grrrr because I had to remove a comment and I hate doing that.
ReplyDeleteThanks Jonathan and Jane. Jane, I don't think I could. It's hard enough staying in character for a 1,000 words let alone a full novel!